Comments on: The Forgotten Colony https://mushroom-scholars.org/the-forgotten-colony/ Teaching & Learning English Fri, 18 Apr 2025 09:36:00 +0000 hourly 1 https://wordpress.org/?v=6.9.5 By: picklez_the_cat https://mushroom-scholars.org/the-forgotten-colony/comment-page-1/#comment-586 Fri, 18 Apr 2025 09:36:00 +0000 https://mushroom-scholars.org/?p=11157#comment-586 change Dr.Terrett to Princess Terrett

]]> By: Director Dr Durian https://mushroom-scholars.org/the-forgotten-colony/comment-page-1/#comment-152 Tue, 28 May 2024 07:56:21 +0000 https://mushroom-scholars.org/?p=11157#comment-152 Wow! I’m in the story 🙂
This is an interesting idea, which feels like the back story for a sci-fi epic. You could easily spin off a series of stories about the relationship you have established between the human colonists and the Elders.
I like the personification of the ‘vines reeking with fear’.
I think the fear of things disappearing would be enhanced if you changed ‘people’ to ‘things’ in this sentence “But then, people started disappearing.’ That would have the effect of making your following description of the things that disappear escalate, building greater tension in the reader.

There are a few minor language errors, but maybe that’s a good thing as it shows me you didn’t over-rely on AI for this text.

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