Comments on: The Fateful Asteroid

By: ToBiUs

ToBiUs — Thu, 13 Jun 2024 14:19:50 +0000

In reply to Director Dr Durian. true, it is very nice

By: 1NF3RN0_H07L1N3

1NF3RN0_H07L1N3 — Thu, 13 Jun 2024 07:23:16 +0000

In reply to Director Dr Durian. Thanks for helping me realize the difference between conscience and consciousness. I now understand that conscience means an inner voice that guides one to interpret what is right or wrong, whereas consciousness means being aware of one's surroundings. As for "in which" vs. "which," I now understand that "in which" correlates two different units in the same sentence, which is unnecessary sometimes.

By: Director Dr Durian

Director Dr Durian — Thu, 13 Jun 2024 06:46:12 +0000

Very impressive work! I particularly like: “I shrieked like a provoked squirrel and started flopping on the ground towards the time machine instead of crawling. I truly felt like an incompetent idiot while performing those dance moves, and I realized that I will never be the same again.” The paragraph to the left of the dinosaur image is also very impressive.

A couple of language points:
1. You’ve made the same mix up with ‘conscience’ vs ‘consciousness’ that DrTerrettIsBald (I can’t believe I just wrote that!) made.
2. Don’t over do the ‘in which’. Most times you only need ‘which’. Check out the answer in this forum for help understanding the difference: https://ell.stackexchange.com/questions/70085/what-is-the-difference-between-which-and-in-which

By: Director Dr Durian

Director Dr Durian — Thu, 13 Jun 2024 06:40:34 +0000

In reply to DrTerretIsBald. Yes, very nice!

By: DrTerretIsBald

DrTerretIsBald — Wed, 12 Jun 2024 02:46:18 +0000

I love the detailed description and also the well executed similes

By: DrTerretIsBald

DrTerretIsBald — Wed, 12 Jun 2024 02:41:39 +0000

Nice