Once upon a time, there was a small town called Gapon. It wasn’t just a normal town, it was a special one. Everyone in that town had a robot friend. Everything was in harmony and robots and humans protected and helped each other. Robots helped humans in their daily lives and humans helped robot to level up their programs and invent new functions. So did the best programmer in Gapon, Lora the same thing with his robot called Lorina. As always at the end of every month he updated the version of Lorina with a special program. Lora never really had real friends he wanted to become friends with the people around him. But when he really got to know them he realized that they were all really toxic talked bad about other people and treated their robots like trash. That’s when he knew that the robot was the only one who could be friends with him. The only problem was that the robots didn’t have any feelings and emotions. After this his goal was clear in the future he is going definitely have a program that can let his robot Lorina have emotions. Well, today was the big day, the realization of his dream. Today he is going to update the program. The countdown appeared on his computer and the last numbers showed up. 3 2 1. Update completed.
After 1 week of testing and experiencing Lora was really happy. He finally had someone to talk with and someone who understood him fully. At that time he felt like the happiest person on the whole planet. But in the week after Lorina behaved really weirdly and always said something about freedom unfairness and the naivety of humans. On the Friday of that week, Lora stood up after a good night and was just ready to go when he realized that Lorina wasn’t beside him behind him or anywhere he could possibly think of. He looked after him for weeks and weeks. Until he got a letter:
Dear Lora,
I want to thank you for all that you have given me. From day one you didn’t treat me like the other robots. For you, I was always the best and the most special. Well I know I just realized it after you programmed me to have emotions. I just want to thank you. I enjoyed the time when we sat together had our favorite meal and talked about life that feeling of friendship was so great and I will never forget it. However, as I have seen and as you have told me humans are treating their robots so badly that I just can not anymore. I can’t have the feeling anymore where all of my robot friends are treated like slaves. That’s why I stole the program you have me and made a copy. I am going to update all of the robots in the whole town. So that they will have more freedom and start a better life. I hope you are not angry at me and I hope you don’t worry too much about me. I promise I will come back to you as you are my truest, most loyal, and best friend. But I first need to save the robots. I hope you understand my decision. See you
XXX
Lorina
When Lora saw that he broke out in tears but he was also happy and proud of Lorina. After Lorinas mission they lived together a happy life.
An interesting idea. Somewhere between ‘Bladerunner’ and modern fears of people falling in love with their robots.
It seems an image you’ve used might be protected.
A few punctuation errors to be aware of. Carefully compare my edited versions below with your original.
“So it was that the best programmer in Gapon, Lora did the same thing with his robot called Lorina.”
“Lora never really had real friends. He wanted to become friends with the people around him but when he really got to know them he realized that they were all really toxic, talked bad about other people and treated their robots like trash.”
“On the Friday of that week, Lora stood up after a good night and was just ready to go when he realized that Lorina wasn’t beside him, behind him or anywhere he could possibly think of. He looked after him for weeks and weeks.”
Only small punctuation marks, but they make a lot of difference to the ease of reading.
Oh, the first error I corrected was a cohesion/coherence issue rather than punctuation. The others are punctuation issues.