In the universe of Big Chungus, Richard gets trapped in a city like Venice. The waterways, the buildings, looks exactly like the city of Venice, but it was the shops that don’t seem Italian. There was Chinese on it. He quickly realized he was in The Venetian, in Macao.
He went back to his hotel, The Venetian, and slept like a baby. The following morning, he opened his curtains, seeing something different. What he saw was the pitch black of outer space. He thought someone was pranking him, but he couldn’t open the door of his room. The room started spinning, and he saw planet earth from his window, he was sure he was in space.
Someone was knocking the door, shouting “Agfhusasasldghbw” meaning “Who is In there?” Well, normally you would get scared if you were in a situation like this, but he wasn’t. In fact, he loaded a pistol that he found in the safe. “It’s a game” sounded the radio, earth had just explode——-
*story ends as the writer is on earth and earth just exploded
Thanks ToBiUs! I’m glad to see you have started blogging!
There was once a certain Director T-1000 who told stories of a Big Chungus. Do you know him?
So, feedback: Your story is nice and simple. It’s easy to read and the abrupt ending is quite appropriate. It is a bit like something from Monty Python.
However, beware this kind of run-on with a comma where there should be a new sentence:
“The room started spinning, and he saw planet earth from his window, he was sure he was in space.”
Also, consider using the ‘topic tags’ so your blog post shows up in topic related listings, and maybe add a ‘featured image’ so that displays in the listings too.